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........Colorful Fun
....Living Feeling Loving
..You Me November December
....Ending Forgetting Dying
.........Dim Cold

crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond

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The following comments are for "Happiness - Sadness"

Poetry is meant to be spoken, so there's really no point in creating cute designs with words/ellipses. This poem is so mired in ambiguity that it fails to evoke any kind of emotional response from me.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Happiness - Sadness
I understand how you felt, die_daily and thanks for visiting this page. I just hope you also tried reading my other posts. About this one, I just fancied copying a style I saw in one of my poetry books. This may not have created an emotional response from you but it had to me. You will find that I tried to construct words with regards to their connection to the others. Thanks for saying it has a cute design, I was even trying to make a perfect diamond but it's obvious that I failed!*LOL* To others who will read this, I hope that you'll be able to find its meaning, otherwise, I might just agree with die_daily and delete this post. Promise, this will be my last poem (if you should agree to call this a poem) of this kind (although last night after having posted this piece, I thought about why not reversing the diamond and start with Sadness).

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

I like it
I see the connection here peterpaulino. I really like it and I think you should leave it here. Variety IS the spice of life and we all need that. Connecting happy and sad in a unique. It is a refreshing piece and I thank you for sharing it.

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

char and windchime
thanks a lot to the two of you, that you can see I didn't just make a cute design out of words from the dictionary. My Lily, thanks and I'm going to send you an email soon (like after posting this one).

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Nice artistic writing Peter,
I liked it a lot..

All's well..Mouse......

( Posted by: Raejon [Member] On: June 26, 2004 )

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