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From earths deep bowels when flames spit forth,
And thunder shakes the ground.
A seething mass of melted rock,
Is strewn for miles around.

When red grows dark and searing heat,
Has cooled, but all is torn.
The darkest doom lies on the land,
With greyness all forlorn.

In moonlike scenes the earth has changed,
Its rocks now look like seas.
An envelope of fluid mass,
Instead of grass and trees.

Remember this, when earth decides,
To let its voice be heard.
Not even gods can change the path,
That destiny preferred.

Ivor G Davies

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This is my personal favorite of the rock poems. I originally called it 'Basalt', which I was never happy with. For years I have called it 'Destiny' but have now retitled it to 'Lava' to get back to the theme for this posting.

I would apreciate you view on the title, it is the only poem I have ever written that I do not 'feel' I can get the title right on!


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The following comments are for "Lava"
by ivordavies

Lava
Hi Ivor, I think this is a great title. Then again I like them short and to the point. This poem says it all about what the lave really does.I think its the best title for it. It feels to me as though you put much deep felt thought into this .Very nice..My Best..Lorraine.P.S. me,just a novice.

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

Lava
Sorry ,mis-spelled Lava.Sorry.Lorraine

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

Lava...
I like the title lava, but could only think of one other befitting such a great work... Sea of Rock

Only a few miles from my property in New Mexico, is an old lava flow... The patterns and beauty of the now thousand year old rock belies the danger and plight its path took when flowing...

Imagining the heat, and weight of the flow is hard indeed...

My favorite lines are..."An envelope of fluid mass, Instead of grass and trees."


This poem has become my favorite of yours...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

lava
i personally loved the last part where it says
"Remember this, when earth decides,
To let its voice be heard"
really nice, and since i'm not so good at giving titles to my own poetry, i was going to skip the comment on this poem, but i decided to just give it a try anyway. i thought "earth's voice" or something that goes around the idea of earth having a voice would be good. nice work

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Lava
Beautiful. I'm there, reading this. I think "Lava" is a good title, cause it set me up very well for what I was to see unfold in your words. Thank you. -emaks

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Lava it is!...Ivor
Thank you all for your comments on this, I am pleased you liked it. This was originally written as part of the rock collection but its meaning has stuck in my mind.

Not even gods can change the path,
That destiny preferred.

This seems to have travelled with me forever and is the reason I changed the title to destiny, but its telling the reader what he should think and I didn't like it. I think posting it here made me rethink and as you have all welcomed lava, and it hit home with you Dan, that's where it will stay.

Thank you all, very very much,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Lava
Lava is the perfect title, in my opinion. And what a great write it is. I am in awe. Somehow I overlooked the real beauty of rocks and lava before reading this series. I am happy you shared it. Thanks so much.

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Lava
Lava, yeah I like it, good title. Ivor, this is wonderful. I just recently started paying lots of attention to rocks. Strange that now I have a poem to go with them. Beautiful.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Lost amongst the Rocks
Sorry all,

I'v got lost amongst the rocks and seem to be answering comments on the wrong poems. Thank you all for your welcome feedback.

Lucie, I accept all you have said and will be looking to improve a couple of things. I have replied more fully somewhere amongst the rocks!

Thank you all once again,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )

Nice!
Ive always marveled at the earths wonders... Lava and volcanos being one of those to behold with respect and awe. For with it, comes the creation of new earth and beauty. As does with all of Mother Natures plans.

I loved the "flow" (pun intended) of this poem. Reminded Me of a steady strong heartbeat.

ps..Im not sure I like the title "Lava" although it is direct and to the point.

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )

good thinking poem
Well done on this poem. My favorite line is, "In moonlike scenes the earth has changed" That's a great comparison and contrast, which provides a good visual.

I was thinking of one possible change to the lines "An envelope of fluid mass/Instead of grass and trees." might be "An envelop of fluid mass/inside are grass and trees" - this would play off the 'envelope' idea and.

From a philosophical standpoint I was thinking about the lines "Not even gods can change the path/That destiny preferred" and I thought about how that would make destiny itself god via its supreme 'preferring' one thing to another. Which makes destiny personal or at least volitional. And therefore one interpretation is the poem is saying gods can't change what god has decided.

( Posted by: inkton [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )

Lava
Speechless!

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )

Spectacular and visceral
What a wonderfully visceral poem, it's beauty overwhelms me. Thank you for your brilliance!

( Posted by: magica [Member] On: July 10, 2004 )





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