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Through the fading ink
and the glimmering blink;
glimpses of what you would do
The diverted news and the angrified youth
all followed your trail for a fistfull of truth


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The following comments are for "I have heard about you"
by DrKilldare

I have heard about you
I like this one... I gave it a 10.

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Inflation! Prices could soar!
I didn't mean to start a wave of 9 and 10 judgings... Did you? We should stop it, now.

(Check out the "Comments-new")

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

This is a 10!
Dr. what better wave to surf than that of a 10? I am all for it, but if I ever have to give a low one, I will comment then too ;-) Looking forward to reading more of your poems.

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Thanks Dareva..
Really appreciate this. That was only late night I went to see a list of Charmr's comments, and I realized his judgding for this poem was not so unique...
As we say: Have a good day!

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )

I Have Heard About You
I may not have heard right away that there's such a very good short poem like this one, but I know it's not yet late. This is a rather strong poem, with lines talking straight to the face.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: June 29, 2004 )

I write about you...
and I dream about creating a title that is as capturing as this. When you read/hear a title like this you simply have GOT to read on.
The rest of your poem also follows the exiting, but vexing, atmosphere of the title.

However, although I like the whole poem, I think the poem would be better with one last line. In terms of stanza rhythm. Or perhaps it is exactly the point that it ends where it does? It can function kinda like a question hanging unanswered in the air. For my part, at least, I feel there should be a last line (rhyming the third one), but maybe it is a clever effect of the actual structure to deny me this closure?

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 3, 2004 )

Opinions welcomed
Yes, there could have been another line, Lenmart, but not in this poem. The sound and meaning of the last line couldn't be anything than the last word. I invite you to write a strict stanzapoem, if that's more important to you than the "meaning". I'd be glad to read. Thx anuway

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

Ah well
This poem stands on it's metaphorically own two feet, but I agree with Lennart.

( Posted by: paxelius [Member] On: July 6, 2004 )

Meaning and Music
Thanks for the support, Paxelius. I also think that the good doctor's poem stands on its own feet. And DrKilldare, I agree that instead of criticising you, I could write what I propose in a poem, instead of in theory. Feel free to check out 'Moments of You'.

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 14, 2004 )





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