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as i hold her in my arms, all perfect and new
i wonder how it happened, how it came to be true
how a 16 year old girl now has a child
why was i so reckless, so care free and wild?
he told me that he loved me but when i told him he fled
he said he whould never come back, unless the baby was dead
so now it's just the two of us,i will try not to be sad
and even though it may be hard, she will one day have a dad
but for now we will make it all on our own
although right now, i feel so alown
now the doctors come in and asked me her name
"Joy" i reply but our last names the same
as i get in to the car to go i look back and sigh
here's the lesson i've learned...dont ever trust guys!



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~*~little*one~*~


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The following comments are for "my mistake"
by littleone

what
what the fuck is this? u dont have a kid man what is up this

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: January 11, 2005 )

Hello? Censors?
B*stard, not ok. F*ck is. got it. Also Jess's F*ck poem ok, my crit not.

( Posted by: brad [Member] On: January 11, 2005 )

Brad!
It's just the SUBJECT LINE, man! Calm down! lol

:)

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: January 11, 2005 )

viper
brad has chilled (I've always wanted to refer to myself in the 3rd person).. my fault. too quick to anger
littleone, well spoken on a very hard subject. sorry for the invasion,
brad

( Posted by: brad [Member] On: January 11, 2005 )

misty
ya i know i dont really have a kid dumbie......but i have a friend who fits this discription perfictly.....and ya i kinda wrote it thinking what it whould be like and ya.
kathleen
littleone

( Posted by: littleone [Member] On: January 21, 2005 )

JOY....OK
Hey, littleone, doesn't matter who birthed this
beautiful Joy, everyday will bring many souls
happiness, I pray. A child diddn't ask for those
cards dealt, mom did. Trust me I was just a lucky,
young woman only difference, Daddy would have killed me grave yard dead, the "him" first. Look out for forked tongues(snakes) talk out of both sides of their mouth, BEWARE-usually good-looking, too. I,m going to send this mother, some powerful American Indian Medicine, passed down from my mother, from my mimd to hers, things will be great....Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: January 21, 2005 )

i see
hey kathleen what friend would that be cuz i know all of them but o well i guess it makes sense in a twisted way my staff nat says you presented it well and its a good poem shes retarded but i agree anyways buh bye luv misty

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: January 24, 2005 )

misty
ya misty you dont know steph. she's form sturgon shes my cousins friend......she had a lil boy named evan like 9 months ago
so ya
thats all she wrote
kathleen
littleone

( Posted by: littleone [Member] On: February 12, 2005 )

steph
when i read this poem it screamed steph to me i saw where u were comming from when u wrote it but u no shes confused and the never trust a guy thing its not that u cant trust them u just need 2 no how 2 read them u no r they palyin yah r they realy in love wiff u whats happenig in there most offten primative minds so yah u can trust guys just learn how 2 read them i no u can read me so its almost the same sept the majority of them think wiff there sexuall organs hehe ok love yah bies

( Posted by: tinibaby69 [Member] On: March 8, 2005 )





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