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It should be easy, should it not?
To get the hang of up and down
That makes the IP swing and trot
And cloaks the poem in its gown.

If done in style, that is the crown
I`d like to wear just once with glee;
But I feel just another frown
While counting feet, one two and three.

But more should grow, just like a tree
not stacked like bricks, as children do
my goal looms just in front of me
then wham, the foot sticks in the goo.

Doc Martens and High-Heels donít mix
Erato plays her dirty tricks.

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The following comments are for "IP"
by Sneaky

The Iambic Pen
A clever treat, as always, Sneaky. I'm hopeless at weilding iambic pentameter, myself, so I got quite a chuckle out of this -- good stuff.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: June 22, 2004 )

aesthetic response
i follow hazel to this gem
and realize, once more, no doubt
that sneaky's horse wins once again.
no plodding here: a stately trot.

this meter thing, it's quite exact!
(we've all got heartbeats, folks, it's true)
you named precision's child "Thwack."
your knife is sharp, my friend. adieu.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: June 22, 2004 )

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