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striving for a sun of love and togetherness
brings me down like a stone that has reached its arc.
striving towards a surreal sun
has only turned skies black

i spin on a line, plummeting away from
infinity, falling past you and down, stabbing into me.

now i can see that this is my love to you
i am gracious and full like the moon i descend to.
on the everlasting line, the suns embrace
will never be closer.

but ive known all along,
a moon pushed dormant in the twofold.
and if i spin myself down
through to infinity to self-hatred
ill eclipse my sun
and find my ultimate in love.

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The following comments are for "ive found you, my love"
by joeyjoejoe3

This is brilliant! I love the use of imagery that you use in all your poetry. I especially like "ill eclipse my sun
and find my ultimate in love."

I'm glad I found your poetry, where was it hiding!!! I love it, keep it up!!

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: July 6, 2004 )

thankyou serendipity, i really appreciate your feedback. these have been lurking in diaries for years so im thankful that they are actually having some effect. i really admire the positive spin you write into some of your work.

( Posted by: joeyjoejoe3 [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

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