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What you ask for, I cannot give --
for who could possibly convey
through language, speech
simple words
the one thing you either
know or refuse to believe?
There are no platitudes, promises
or tokens which can contain
even briefly grasp this distant sun
Hope simply rests
itís gentle light upon
the horizonís shoulders
beckons with a winking glimmer
if you can but see
lifting your eyes up and out of misery
from the clasp of your hands
which frame your doubt
The open sky, the tracks ahead --
what exists, exists, with or without
you, even if
the wending
trouble of your heart
never lets your tunnel-vision out.

"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"

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The following comments are for "Regarding Tomorrow"
by hazelfaern

Regarding Tomorrow
This is a very deeply moving poem. Thanks for sharing this with us Hazel..:-)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 19, 2004 )

Hazel dear...
Hazel dear...such wisdom in one so young! (anyone under 50 is young to me,lol)!

There is an old can lead a horse to water...but you can't make him drink! This is waht tough love is all about. You can give all the nurturing, caring, prodding etc. in the world, but is their choice. You can only draw back and pray that when they hit bottom (as they surely must before bobbing back up again) they will remember your love and concern and will...hopefully...begin to reclaim their lives and your respect. And sometimes, especially in young is necessary to step back in order to avoid being pulled into the void with them!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: June 20, 2004 )

Not Quite Tough Love
Your reference to tough love made me wince a little, Beatrice. I've had some bad experiences with that philosophy and actually wrote my feelings about it into a poem "Tough Love, Soft Crime" some six months ago when I was new to the site.

I hadn't intended for this poem to come across as cold or even as a rebuke, but just as a simple invitation to awakening. Sometimes life isn't difficult or complicated so much as that we make it that way. Sometimes lingering misery becomes a kind of warm cocoon, a familiar space that's been home so long it feels frightening to contemplate leaving it. But Hope is no monster it's just the sun doing it's thing, hanging out in the sky, offering up a little warmth which is freely there if you feel brave enough to take it.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: June 20, 2004 )

A lovely read..
Simply as my title states, a lovely read, with some very interesting comments to boot. I found it, as your other commentators seem to have, both inspiring and enlightening.

( Posted by: C.Lynagh [Member] On: June 20, 2004 )

Regarding Tomorrow
Well, this one seemed to be scolding me. I am enjoy misery and make it like a turtle-shell to wrap me around. You used just enough accompanying imagery to make the lesson have more impact.

I like this one too (okay... I am already sounding like I am window shopping, pointing at the ones I like to buy LOL)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )

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