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Drown me in a river, where I'm all alone
Drown me in a river, and leave me prone
Drown me in a sea where I'm out of reach
Leave me for days till I'm thrown to the beach
Leave me for the people to see my corpse
Let there be sadness and remorse
Let them burn me up and cry
Scatter my ashes in the sky
Let me fly away for days
Let the breeze take me away from this place
To heaven let me soar
Let me fly through that bright white door
With all the angels I want to be
Chain me to heaven, never set me free
Let the years pass and let the people keep in mind
That the trail to heaven was not easy to find
Let them remember me for years
And let them shed their deepest tears
Let them lament the day I died
Let them pray for me side by side
Pray to god for forgiveness and understanding
And pray to join me where I am standing



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The following comments are for "the trail to heaven"
by seniorme

Moet...Ivor
Moet,

I really do not know how I have missed you work, but I have now put that right and have looked and enjoyed all your posts. I am amazed that apart from your first post, you have attracted no comments. I can only assume that this is because of a fluke in the way things pass through the front page.

This piece along with your others, I personally find exceptional, the depth and meaning in your poetry and the 'mind picture' it paints are exceptional.(yes even when you write about mudering somebody!)

The only suggestion I could make, is take as much time writing a title as you took writing the poem, this is the thing that gets it noticed and also remember...it is part of the poem!

Keep up the good work,
Kudos,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 18, 2004 )

Heaven for you
First of all, I hope heaven is for you. Then I get to say great job!!! You have outdone yourself. This is great. "Chain me to Heaven, never set me free", is so beautifully worded. Your title is also quite catchy. Overall, I think this is great. Keep it up, I'd love to keep reading more. You say you are only 15, but you are far wiser than your age. This is exceptional. Keep it up!!
Serendipity

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: June 20, 2004 )

The trail to heaven
This is the most beautiful poem I have read. A place where everyone wants to go, no matter their religion or belief.... deep down inside their heart beats and their sould cries for heaven.

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )





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