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i loved you and you loved me,
or at least thats how it seemed.
you held me and told me how much you did care,
then you left me, how could you dare?
you where the first guy that i ever loved,
you seemed so perfect,my angel from above.
always you where there by my side,
no matter what you where down for the ride.
we had so many firsts together,
it seemed to me we whould last forever.
then one day it ended from out of the blue,
i couldn't belive it, how could it be true?
i tryed not to cry, not in front of my friends,
the whole day was torture, when whould it end?
i cried that night till i had no more tears,
i didn't know it then, but this was my one of my greatest fears.
i have tryed to move on,
i have tryed to be strong,
but no matter what i do i keep wishin you where in my arms.
but i will be brave and pretend its aright
but no matter how i try still miss you every night.






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~*~little*one~*~


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The following comments are for "the day i lost you"
by littleone

Awsome !!!!!
WOW thats wickedly wacked!! it was awsome. anywaze ya so bye.
P.S. keep on writing! lol

( Posted by: shortyboy [Member] On: June 18, 2004 )

wow
this is an awsome poem man keep it up well i love yah BIES

( Posted by: tinibaby69 [Member] On: March 8, 2005 )

YEAH!!!
hey hey thats awesome man sorry i haven't looked up ne of ur stuff in awhile but i really like this one sop keep writin man -Peace

( Posted by: twistymisty [Member] On: April 6, 2005 )

DeMoNiCcHiLd
Hey! It is I your Demonic twin and I really like this poem it is great. Keep on goin. Luv ya

~M.J.~

( Posted by: DeMoNiCcHiLd [Member] On: October 30, 2005 )





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