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Some call me Suga
Though I admit Iím not too sweet
My life engulfed in fairy tales
Bound to sweep you off your feet
As I prance around this perfect place
Without so much as a smile upon my face
Something is wrong, so terribly wrong
This isnít my home, I donít belong
In this too perfect world that was too good to be true
I had to return to a reality I knew
A world where every breath is filled with drama and pain
You never wake up to a day thatís the same
Where innocent people are hurt everyday
We are shunned if we decide to see things a different way
Where peace brings war and love brings pain
Itís enough to drive a person insane
This is my home, this is where I belong
Holding my breath and trying to stay strong
Waiting for the days to come
When I might escape back to my fantasy world


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Thanks for taking the time to read my poems. Much love kiddos and I hope my poems meant something to you! Never give up on your dreams :)


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The following comments are for "Some Call Me Suga"
by SuGapLuM1107

suga
try 8 or 10 syllable lines or rhymes in that format. works pretty darn well. you have good content in your work.great heart.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: June 27, 2004 )

Reminds me
'where peace brings war and love brings pain' reminded me of lyrics by John Lennon, 'Working Class Hero' 'They hate you if you're clever and despise a fool / until you're so f____ing crazy, you can't follow their rules'. I liked the sentiment being expressed here, Suga, but I agree with Pen & Will, you need to sort out your rhythm.
Take care
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: June 27, 2004 )

Haha
aitte... thanks guys... i agree my rhymin kinda sucks... i get my patterns all screwed up... thats why i stick to rant :) that and i think it's funner for me haha... but yeah, I'll try and work on that... I'm actually taking a class to help me work on my rhyming. Hopefully it will pay off :D Thanks for all your help and for taking the time to read my poems.. it really means alot! :)

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 27, 2004 )





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