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I spread my wings and I am free
I am a bird lost in flight hoping never to be found
For up here I find peace with the setting of the sun
I find comfort in the quite of the moon
I find joy in hearing the songs of the birds as we sing in sweet harmony
I am free

I soar without a care in the world
As the wind whispers to me of its secrets
And the clouds begin to cry
Lightening strikes and thunder roars
The birds and I, we sing no more

I wish I was home again
Snuggled deep in the confines of my nice warm bed
I cry out for help but nobody answers
I hear only the quiet of the moon


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Thanks for taking the time to read my poems. Much love kiddos and I hope my poems meant something to you! Never give up on your dreams :)


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The following comments are for "Free of Flight"
by SuGapLuM1107

Free of Flight
Hi There, Your poems is very nice.I really like the part about peace and the birds singing. Very pretty.I also wanted to thank you for the wonderful comment you gave to me om my poem Love. I'm very happy that you liked it and took the time to comment. Please keep writing,you are young and can only get better.Don't give up on your dreams.My best..Lorraine

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

Thanks!
Merci! et toi aussi.. or in other words, just in case you don't speak French... thanks and you too :) I really enjoyed your poem so the comment was well deserved :) The best to you too! Suga

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

only the quiet of the moon
Mmmm. I really liked the change in direction of this poem. You hear so many things on the wonder of flight, it was nice to read something that considered those times when the birds "sing no more". My suggestion would be a more enticing intro. Maybe something that very subtly hints at the upcoming change in direction?

( Posted by: SkyTigress [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

hmmm
Thanks! I'll see what I can do about the beggining. But read the poem again... It's not just about a bird. When I wrote this poem I was trying to paint an image in the readers mind. Read the poem again and see if you can guess what I'm writing about. I wanna make sure I wrote it the right way. If you can't then I probably got more to work on then just the beggining :)Write back what you think please. Much love, Muah!

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

haha..
here's a hint... try putting yourself in a teens shoes and then read the poem again. It's abuot something every teen fears but dreams about.

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

Super!
Another young mind bites my curiousity. How wise you can be for a few years lived. Keep up the writing, I enjoyed this, and I did put on my TEEN shoes....thanks!

( Posted by: catlesfemme [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

lol :)-
thanks for the comment. I am really glad you liked my poem. Haha, when I tried to get my grandma to read this poem she said she had inconveniently left her teen shoes at home... haha, good old gramma. Got to love her. I just want to thank you guys again for takin the time to read my work. And I will try to continue to produce qork satisfying to your interests. It means alot to know I have your support :) Much love kiddos. Yeah that's right... the 15 year old is callin you all kiddos :) Muah!

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )





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