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Suga
Curious, confused, crazy, and different
4th in line in a family of 6
Lover of the arts, her family and all of lifeís challenges
Who feels fatigue at the very thought of homework, anger towards every failure I make, and sorrow in every life that is lost whether in death or in spirit
Who finds happiness in her family, her school and music
Who needs to stop stressing over every little thing and learn to relax, to learn to trust guys again unless she wants to grow old and lonely, and a really good masseur
Who would like to see the milky-way some night, a guy who is sweet, funny, smart cute, single and who isnít gay, and her life and family back the way it was before all the fighting and yelling
Who fears being lonely, erudites, and big people with guns
Who gives her heart to those in need, her life to those she loves, and her soul to god
Who enjoys gazing at the stars just because they are there, singing her heart out when nobody can hear it, and being surrounded by those she loves and trusts
Who likes to wear her heart on her sleeve, a smile on her face and clothes that fit
Resident of the pink house on the corner
Plum


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Thanks for taking the time to read my poems. Much love kiddos and I hope my poems meant something to you! Never give up on your dreams :)


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The following comments are for "C'est Vrai Moi"
by SuGapLuM1107

you guys wanna know what the real me is like?
there is no guessing or reading between the lines in this one. This is my bio poem. It was by me, about me. So if you think you have me figured out just read this poem and see how close you actually were :)

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 22, 2004 )

lol.. merci, merci et merci
wow... i'm guessing that means you liked it? lol, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem... I think your comment was actually one of the most brightest and positive things anyone has ever said about my writings on this post so again.. thankyou.. And yes I did mean for it to translate into the real me.. haha, if you liked that one I hope you like my next one. It should be published soon. It's called When I am 65. Thanks again for taking the time to read. Much love to ya. Muah!

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 22, 2004 )

c'est blah blah blah.
There were some good lines here and some bad ones. Overall, there isn't much that separates this from a journal entry, and there's a thread of self-obsession running throughout the entire poem. But I guess that's the point, eh, given the comment you posted. Anyway, the goods:

"4th in line in a family of 6", "Resident of the pink house on the corner/Plum."

The bad: "Lover of the arts" is cliche, "enjoys gazing at the stars" (every hopeless romantic gazes at the stars), and "her heart on her sleeve." Cliches are empty phrases; they have been used so much that their impact barely registers.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: June 22, 2004 )

ummm
hmmm, sorry ya didn't like it die daily... but i can't change it because a biopoem is an actual type of poem.. i had to stick to the format... I have another one about me but it hasn't been posted quite yet... but the poem was written according to format in response to an english assignment given out by my teacher Ms. Vrooman. I think you'll have to take complaints up with her.. hope you like my version though.. the non bio poem one.. hehe, by the way.. it's centered around me cause it's my biopoem. it's like a biography in poetic style... well hope that helped ya kinda understand it more... you don't have to like it.. i just wanted my readers to know me more :) SO if ya learned something about me.. then I did my job :) Au revoir!

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

shizzle.
Yeah, I can dig it. I have never tried to write a biopoem before so I imagine it is challenging to disclose some personal information without coming across as self-involved. Nice try though.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

C'est Vrai Moi
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You are open and honest




















You are very open and I assume honest stay that way. I gave your bio a 8.









(I assume)

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )

lol :)
haha.. thanks! I try ;)

( Posted by: SuGapLuM1107 [Member] On: June 23, 2004 )





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