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How unfair,
How cruel.
You customize your thoughts on
this worlds' behalf, and
make me your excuse.
I decided, and I chose.
but you dangled threats
of loosened pain to justify
your means.
I. obedient,
as you scorn me
with your words,
claiming innocence
after chaining my soul.
Back away,
I dare not look in your eyes,
as you whip me with
words never forgiven.
Wrapped in armor
gold on the outside,
but void of all protection.
You kill me again and again.
How dare you justify me
with your world?
How dare you alienate me
with my feelings?
Give me no more,
take from me no more.
Flesh so wounded,
drenched in blood that
justifies my innocence.
I claim obedience a trapped soul
answering only to God.
I claim you have killed my very essence,
I am what you made me.
I carry faithfulness, dreams of
a better tomorrow.
where I can walk with prophets,
and claim a victory well earned.



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"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet




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The following comments are for "I Claim"
by Serendipity

keep on the good work
serendipity, you have really outdone yourself this time. this poem is really well written. it seems like you're going through a rough time, it shows the dominance and somewhat brutality. well written, deep....keep on doing it, hope all's well soon.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: June 8, 2004 )

touching...
youve blended raw emotion to flow with weighted words so that i feel recognitition of your pain. and yet you convey resilience and have a positive conclusion "I carry faithfulness, dreams of
a better tomorrow" and "claim a victory well earned". nice work

( Posted by: joeyjoejoe3 [Member] On: July 6, 2004 )

10
I meant to give you ten, Amazing work Serendipity, you have just gone on my fav. list. regards huni.

PS This poem is so authentic, I can hear the pain I see in some of my clients. This is their story too. h.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )





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