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I sat there in unbelieving silence listening to every word you said.
I stared into those so loved eyes wondering into what depths they had been led.
You walked away, without a word, a care or even another chance.
You left our future together planned up until a week before, abandoned in a moment and completely askance.
Yet I keep feeling these shadows of love late at night down the hall.
Their meaning remains a mystery and like us may turn out to be just nothing at all.
So, I'm looking out my window, at the life we walked through over these days.
Wanting to hear your tones, nuances and lilt and to break out from this haze.

-- Stacey

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The following comments are for "The distance between"
by Dolphingurrl

it reminds me of
the third time a girl dumped me just prior to going to bali on vacation (always bali). I cashed in the tickets and retreated to an island in thailand where i spent two weeks locked in my hotel room drinking mekong whiskey and watching MTV Asia with the sweater she borrowed wrapped around my head. thanks for reminding me (i guess...)

( Posted by: wrdekle [Member] On: June 8, 2004 )

Good emotion lost in forced rhyming. Like the word askance. Terms outside the vernacular are good if the context and feel of the poem warrants it. But pain and hurt are raw, unflowery emotions.
I always say that depression creates great poetry. As long as you permit it free reign over the pencil. Tap into your emotion and write it down, don't worry about format or rhyme. Then read over it. You'll find pieces of good poetry that can grow into bigger things.

Here's to happiness in life or at least in writing.

( Posted by: Raui [Member] On: June 8, 2004 )

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