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Who am I? Am I your inspiration? Am I the wind that screeches through the air? Whoever I am or whoever you are, we all have something to accomplish in this world. Whether you create world peace, or you grant freedom, you, not a country or dictator, are the only world power. Now take that power and take it as a privilege. And deep inside your heart you know the greatest power of all has granted you this power. You.

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by zacharu

Hope you enjoyed this poem. This one I wrote in 5th grade and it became a big hit at my school and home. It got published in the school year book on the front page and my family loved it. I hope you liked it. Comments are deeply appreciated.

( Posted by: zacharu [Member] On: June 13, 2004 )

Such Wisdom...Ivor

I will be the first to admit, that I am not qualified to comment on this style of poetry, as I am an old fashioned rhyming addict. However, I found it flowed beautifully and I enjoyed your style, which is really what matters!

The content, is exceptional
'you, not a country or dictator, are the only world power.'
At 12 years old, you have unraveled the realities of life. Personal responsibility is possibly the only thing that matters.

May god give you strength to influence the things you can, accept the things you cannot, and know the difference, (not my quote)

I think you are a lot futher along this path than most. Your poetry has certainly raised my emmotions and this is the sign of good poetry.

I like this piece, and I am sure that other authors on this site will assist, if you need it, with your free writing.

Thank you


( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 13, 2004 )

Once more I thank all of you for you complements and comments. I do like to here from what other people have to say about my work so that I can fix or rework something, or be inspired by your complements. So thankyou.

( Posted by: zacharu [Member] On: June 19, 2004 )

I Agree
With comments already made, only to add, NEVER stop writing.......amazing for your age!

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 19, 2004 )

You are special! With your talent, you can do great things.

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: June 19, 2004 )

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