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Pamela Tyree-Gavin

Before he died
he asked for a bowl of strawberries.
He knew he should not have them
But he said
"What the heck -
Death is coming no matter what
I eat."

So I went down by the woods
at the edge of our property -
just where the sun
kisses the fallen pine cones and where
the soft breezes bend the tall grasses before dusk.

No bucket - so in
My crisp, white cotton apron
I carried as many strawberries as I could pick.

My hands were stained red-
my mouth too because I ate almost as many strawberries as I carried.

I returned to the house,
dumped them unceremoniously into the
kitchen sink to wash.

He said,
"Did you get ‘em?"
In response, I brought him a
large bowl filled to the overflowing.

And so before he died,
we ate those strawberries, slurping
slowly through one silent hour.

When months later, he was gone-
quietly in the night lying next to me,
I recalled the strawberry day
And thought-
Everybody should have a
strawberry day before they must leave this world.



The following comments are for "HIS STRAWBERRY DAY"
by Pamela

pamela, this is so simple and lovely and stirring. i'm moved and overwhelmed. thank you. the part that really captured me and drew me in was the description of the edge of your property. yes! so well done. you took us with you on that walk.

i like that you left the relationship between narrator and "he" ambiguous. it's perfect that way.

my only quibble:
i'd cut "must" in the last line.


( Posted by: ark [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

To Red
Thank you very much for your comments and for even reading the poem. I am so happy you liked it.

( Posted by: Pamela [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

To Ark
Last comment was directed to "RED" in error-meant ARK! Just getting familiar w/this system.

( Posted by: Pamela [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

I certainly agree with your use of
..."Everybody should have a
strawberry day before they must leave this world."

Because... after all... we all MUST leave this world. To get back home... where we belong...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

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