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I am so rejected by all the world around me that cant see who this girl really is inside
I dont want them to understand me the cant understand me bcuz my mind is mine
i was a reject on the barbie line, i had yellow teeth i wanted a truck n i thought i was 2 good 4 ken
I cudnt cook didnt want no kids hated the other girls n pulled off one of their heads
I told little kelly to go and see little tommy and learn how to not be like me
They wanted 2 get me detroyed because i wasnt made with a smile for ppl to buy and see
I was rejected as a care bear bcuz im made of black i had blood on my stomach from killing that annoying shreiky
when they finally gave me that care bear stare i said you dont like me cuz i have black and hmph o well i have my own set of keys
I was rejected for writing this poem at first cuz really it has no beat
But o well arent the words cool enough to tap your little feet
I was also rejected as a piano key bcuz i was blue and when hit yelled SCREW OFF
The others didnt like me, they actually told me to go so i did so n put them outa tune so they sounded off
I only found someone who hasnt rejected me yet
i think he likes me i think he loves me he says this n i dont even get upset
So id just like to say screw you barbie screw you care bears n screw you piano keys!
I love you hunn i hate you ken! so i'll just leave in my truck
i know i spelt words wrong.. i know it has no beat.. grr lol



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Maestroe


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The following comments are for "dont call me normal"
by Maestroe

unbeatnick?
Maybe no beat, but I can at least hear you! thanks!

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: June 5, 2004 )

Getting it...
Wish I would have read this fisrt. I feel like a jerk. U R A KOOOL KID!

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 27, 2004 )

"fisrt" (first)
See, I'm far from perfect! We all are. Keep writing. Take care of you.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 27, 2004 )

The Kid...Rogan's questions.
Sometimes the "normal" rules do not apply. This kid is expressing, not breaking any laws. I learned something here. Would I wish to see better spelling? Of course. I would hope staff saw what I did. I know why I gave this rating. My first comment to this kid was rough. I questioned spelling. Then I looked deeper. Then I read. I didn't judge. I got paste my own perceptions. You can be upset with me. I can take it. But give the kid a break.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 29, 2004 )





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