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Some time ago, no one’s really sure how long exactly, there lived a couple who where very happy. They lived in a hut that was in the woods by a little village with their son Terrow. Terrow was a tall boy, with blue eyes and blond hair. They where a farming family, and he often helped his father hunt.

When Terrow was about ten he was in the in the forest play in the trees, which he liked to do, when he came upon a young girl about his age whom seemed tiered and hurt from a long gurney. The girl was a scrawny little thing with hazel eyes and golden brown hair. She expand that her name was Jennica and she had run away from her home after finding her parents murdered. Terrow’s parents decided to take her in. Terrow and Jennica stayed together all the time. He thought her how to hunt and enjoy the Forrest as a young boy does. In his youth he didn’t realize the difference between men and women. Neither did Jennica so they both enjoyed themselves in spite of this.

Jennica, unaware of her family origin, had visions that she didn’t comprehend. One night, however she dreamt one of the most vivid vision she had ever dreamt. In this dream her mother came to her and said, “to stay will be a great mistake, my killers are vengeful to your heart. Leave-or-you-will-die.” This did not end the vision. She saw long great dragons, sword fights, and a great feud of wizards, death, and distraction. The most horrifying image was Terrow at his knees begging for the 3 lives.

When Jennica told Terrow of her vision he told her to relax but she refused
To live under the possibility of it coming true, so, Terrow took Jennica and left
The hut. They lived-in a little home in town, they stayed there very happily for two
years. One day Terrow got word that his father had died. He wanted to return to
his mother to help her through this difficult time. Jennica refused still scared of the
image she saw. Terrow begged her to move; he told her it was just her imagination. She didn’t believe that but gave in, hopping her vision was wrong.

When Terrow was just 22 his mother also died. Terrow and Jennica
continued to live in the hut although Jennica (still fearful) wanted to go. She never
got any more visions of that caliber again but she still dreaded the thought of the
original. Other then Jennica’s distress all was well until…


The following comments are for "Dragons Cry"
by QDFlag

ok ok (stitch voice)
ok, i am getting the obvious out of the way so it doesn't have to be brought up, and everyone can focus on the idea. The spelling and grammer does still need work, but i liked the discriptions, they were vivid giving you a good idea as to what the characters were doing but still left enough to the imagination to let you draw up your own conclusion as to what the forrest and the lands looked like. so Q.D. keep typing

( Posted by: rincewind [Member] On: June 4, 2004 )

This was good, but i managed some spelling mistakes. The idea of story is good, i couldn't imagine even better. Like the title of it.

( Posted by: Ilze [Member] On: June 5, 2004 )

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