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Musings of An Existential Freshman

Hello. Do you know how I am?
No?
Ok. Thatís doesnít matter, really.
Iím here.
I live my life, day to day.
I exist.
Same routine, everyday
with occasional events to make it
different
new
alive
But I always return to
THE ROUTINE
Iím still dependant on others for breaks from
THE ROUTINE
Once I get older, once I
get a car
get a job
get a life
I can escape THE ROUTINE
Or so I tell myself
Iíll probably end up with a new
version
manifestation
of THE ROUTINE
But for a while, itíll be different
new
alive
But for now I merely
exist
in this cycle
my ROUTINE


------
Heaven doesn't want me and Hell's afraid I'll take over.


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The following comments are for "Musings of an Existential Freshman"
by SWHCgirl

routine
I find that this poem is very true to life. I am still deciding whether or not that is a good thing. But I really think you hit the nail on the head here. Just curious, is this a freshman in high school or college?

( Posted by: E.G. Evans [Member] On: March 2, 2002 )

Freshman
Freshman in high school. Thanks for commenting- I really really like that. (Hint to all others who may be reading this.) ;)

( Posted by: SWHCgirl [Member] On: March 2, 2002 )

routine
An interesting poem, and a good read. I hope the routine isn't still getting you down! There have been times recently (last year) that I've felt much the same way; I got the car, I got the job... but somehow I forgot to get a life - days become so routine that you can lose track of them. Well, that's how it felt.
Fortunately, these things pass, but your poem brought it back to mind for a moment. Good reading; thank you.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: January 30, 2003 )

mundane
this poem is vague. what's involved in the routine? there's not interesting slant in this piece. you can cut out your first six lines and anything about "existence" as i don't see how that's pertinent to what you're talking about. "Existential" is the wrong term as it has connotations beyond "existing" and into continental philosophy. so, the title would need to be changed. i think the trick with a piece like this is to write about something boring without the writing be boring. you're not there yet.

( Posted by: phxom [Member] On: January 31, 2003 )





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