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LOST LOVE



Baby,
it's like my heart's
been layin' across
an ice-cold railroad track
for weeks
& weeks
gettin' run over
by long
slow-moving
freight trains.


But beware.
I can wait a long time.
I have the experience.
I was a teenager
twisted up in the masochism
of unrequited love.


Ouch!
There goes another train.


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The following comments are for "LOST LOVE"
by gomarsoap

Lost Love
Best be cozying up to the L word.
Them trains run a hundred a day out here.
Still one quick glimmer can swith that freight
to a siding and spare just one night's agony.
Without the hope o' love, we got nothin' baby!
We dun talk 'bout dis brudda
,lg

( Posted by: Lionel Gizik [Member] On: June 9, 2004 )

good, Bob

lonesome, old, slow freight, huh? Like that 'ice-cold railroad track' - lousy mattress, and no pillow to rest your head on.

Nice analogy, charming poem.


john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: June 10, 2004 )

Doug
Very nice piece....... reminds me of how I felt about K.Y. (the most beautiful girl in school/ when I was a senior in high school back in 1959) after she stuck her tongue halfway down my throat, I fell instantly in love with her, then after that she would have absolutely nothing to do with me.....the unrequited love of adolescence!

( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: February 9, 2005 )





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