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Your smile was for my seeing;
now my eyes are in the way,
and achings have become
my terms of exile;
yet, as love divides,
love pleads,
and, as love grants my liberty,
this body, vainly begging,
becomes a rag
blown in a winter wind

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The following comments are for "Your smile was for my seeing"
by johnlibertus

Good poem
Nice & tight with real feeling. The last two lines are terrific. Beautiful.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: June 2, 2004 )

I wanted more concrete images. I like that the poem ends with the solid idea of a "rag blown in a winter wind" but found myself struggling to find my bearings until then.

( Posted by: RachelCelia [Member] On: June 2, 2004 )

not that hard, Rachel

I wrote this to my wife, after she died, Rachel; that's what I meant when I said:

"Your smile was for my seeing;
now my eyes are in the way,"

The '1986 ' at the beginning of the poem is the year it was written.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: June 2, 2004 )

Your smile is for my seeing
How beautiful a tribute to Rachel to post this now. How incredible to be thought of and loved so many years after passing. Thank you for the beautiful read.


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: June 3, 2004 )

I meant to write "how beautiful a tribute to your wife" not Rachel. Sorry about that. I guess I got caught up in the idea of hoping someone will love me this way.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: June 3, 2004 )

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