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Rose Petals

rose petals strewn
drenched in her tears
glistening in the moonlit
rays of yester-years

Azure droplets falling
easing down her cheeks
fast becoming the trademark
of not finding what she seeks

Restless heart beats
loudly in her mind
full of infinate love
for the one she can not find.

Scattered thoughts melding
into dreams that wont come true
her voice will now be silenced
the unspoken captured in blue.

rose petals gone
floating upon the breeze
panic grips her hand
like ice, her heart does freeze.

AR May 26, 2004


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The following comments are for "Rose Petals"
by SinamonAngel

Rose Petals
I like this very much. Nice rhyme and pace. It should be spelled "infinite" though.

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: June 6, 2004 )

roseyyy
a nice poem, especially the third stanza...congratz!

( Posted by: rosebud [Member] On: June 6, 2004 )

bhaskar
a good poem wit a lot of heart especialy the way it is said, like the second stanza very much

( Posted by: bhaskar [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

Merci
Thank you all for the kind comments!
Does a heart good to know that something born of it, touches other people in a positive way.

oh and the spelling... oops! typo!

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: June 15, 2004 )

When Love Turns Blue
I miss your warmth
When Love turns to Winter...
My Heart cracks like ice on the frozen pond
Now that you are gone

And the biting wind
Blowing through my Soul...
Reminds me I'm alone now
Here in the Heart of a frozen tundra
Where Love turns blue with cold

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: April 6, 2012 )





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