cigarette
by John Shade (Member) - published: May 29, 2004
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I like a little taste of death
early in the morning
to remind me that, while it is a new day,
I am just the same me

I love you, cigarette
because you are killing me
and I will defend you like an abused lover
because I cannot let you go

I would like to see a fight
between you, nicotine, and caffeine
to decide, once and for all,
who will be the dominant chemical in my heart

Others I enjoy in moderation
but cigarette and coffee I will
allow to kill me several times a day
for the same reason that I enjoy
Russian literature

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by John Shade

cigarettes...
I like your writing style. and the line "and I will defend you like an abused lover" is a great comparison. your poem is very well written but cigarettes are bad for your health. I quit it. but hey your poem is really good.

( Posted by: cassandra [Member] On: May 30, 2004 )

true

Thanks, cassandra, for your compliment. I do agree with you about cigarettes and admire your ability to quit. Take care.

( Posted by: John Shade [Member] On: May 30, 2004 )

cancer sticks
I think each stanza is strong. Your observations are all unique, which is tricky when writing about smoking. I would like to see more connection between the stanzas though so that each idea doesn't seem like it's own seperate poem. I like reading your work.

( Posted by: RachelCelia [Member] On: June 3, 2004 )

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