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Fish have many, pretty colors, they live beneath the waves,
Some fish seem, to swim in schools, and then some live in caves,
Some are short, and some are small, and some are stringy thin,
Some of them, are wide and tall, and some just dig right in.

There's not much light, beneath the waves, of all our great big seas,
But all the fish, don't seem to mind, they somehow still can see,
Plants live down there, under water, they make things seem so nice,
That all the fishes, dance around, and always check things twice.

Some of us, can swim right down there, others say they won't,
Some of us, seem unafraid, the others they just don't,
Some fish have, large shiny teeth, some have none at all,
Some of them, swim hastily, while others only crawl.

Of all the fish, and animals, my favorite is a star fish,
Whenever I find one, on the beach, I stop and make a wish,
I pick them up, and put them back, far out into the ocean,
And hope they learn, to not return, or repeat that silly notion.

------
Daniel Lloyd Kennedy


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The following comments are for "Fishees Underwater"
by daprdan

swim said the mummy fish
Loved it, paints a perfect picture of the contrasts of the undersea world I've seen whilst diving. It also gives me a feeling of fun in the way you present it.

Not too sure about your last line, though 'or repeat that silly notion', its in keeping with the fun of the piece, but feels as if you got stuck rhyming with 'ocean'. Have you thought of trying 'brine' or 'water' or 'sea'.
ie:
'I pick them up, and put them back, far out into the sea,(brine)
And hope they learn, not to return, that's where they,re meant to be!'(but grant this wish of mine!)

Lovely poem, as I said I can definately feel the fun in this, have you written any really 'silly' pieces as I would love to see some examples of this type from you. It reminds me of a pandora's box, with more bursting to break free.

Thank you

Ivor



( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 6, 2004 )

My Grand Daughter
I wrote this for my granddaughter. She was given an assignment to find a poem about fish. She looked for a while and then ask me to write one. So I did. This was the result. I like the suggestions you offered, but as it was for my granddaughter I will have to get her permission (haha)

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 6, 2004 )

Fishees
I just LOVED this. Reminded me of something whimsical - like Dr. Seuss but so wise. Well done!

Pamela

PS Keep that "silly notion" Rounds out everything!

( Posted by: Pamela [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

Thanks
Thanks Pamela, I enjoy writing the cute ones (and the grandchildren only clamour for more).

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

Thank You Claire
Thanks Claire, I like to make people smile...
Glad you did and hope others too will enjoy it...
It was fun writing it and great to see my granddaughters face when she read it...
Made it all worth while...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )





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