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Forever Shadow

An old shadow drifts in my mind,
Seen but untouched,
Hard to define,
Teases me, echos heard
all this time.
I feel hate, i feel heavy,
All i can do is mime,
This shadow that drifts my mind.

All this way,
Hope to take it away,
Hope to have this souless fade,
But it is evident,
Its here permenent,
This memory,
I can not evade.


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by namelessdragoon

An old shadow drifts in my mind
>>All i can do is mime,
This shadow that drifts my mind.

( Posted by: SkyTigress [Member] On: June 24, 2004 )

~sigh~
I apologize. I really did write more after this one.

I felt this line was very intriguing. I wish the last part hadn't been cut off, I can't remember what I wrote... I think I suggested you expand on this line, describe the shadow, the mimer, how the two interact.

Really sorry, I can't remember...

( Posted by: SkyTigress [Member] On: June 25, 2004 )





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