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To think about tomorrow and class.

Poetry seemed to be a phase starting

at a private university in rural

North Carolina


The progression of decent poetry has been

impeeded by a lack of

intellectual stimuli.

I have no better half that can share

this compassion for free verse stanzas.


I do remember when I did

She would stay up late with the typewriter

I acquisitionaed from her manager for

helping him move into his new house.

Her rhythm was appealing

I can not describe her expressions

as always

she drew from a cigarette

Occasionally she would smile or fix
brown


eyes upon me and wink

Now however I do not have that

I have what I want though-

I have a maiden bursting with
*
*
*energy*
*
*


She desires me and wants children.

I will be the one that she stays with

as long as I want to

Still however the intellectual property rights

are up for sale

I need the fiber.

The thread that will bind us.

I know that its essential pressence

will bring harmony to a band off-key

playing instrument out of tune.



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The following comments are for "A phase"
by xinerama

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The format is not exactly how I intended. The line spacing is off and there is even a typo. It does not take a keen eye to spot it, but it is there.
Anywhay if you read it thank you for doing so.


( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: May 27, 2004 )

From an Oblivious Reader
Evidently, I've been oblivious -- I didn't realize you had new pieces of work posted.

A few oddities (well, especially odd oddities) I noticed -- why "compassion for free verse stanzas"? Are you feeling empathy for informal poetry and why would you need a partner to do so?

And what do you mean by saying that she's the one who'll stay with you as long as you want to -- that's interesting way of phrasing things, I think.

All in all, an interesting piece with promise.

I'm sorry I haven't written back to you since your last e-mail, I've been distracted of late. I still have the half response I started stored in my AOL filing cabinet.

Have you seen Chanda's posts? Check out her "Our Lady of the Tower" story -- you'll like it.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )





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