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Spin a web for me
make it strong
and hide it from my eyes
till I'm tangled in
I'm your little fly

Tell me all your sweet lies
I never knew the truth
bend reality
till it fits your world
I won't complain

Declare my insanity
look the door
and throw the key away
never let me escape
cause I'm your personal lunatic

Enjoy your victory
believe in your sucess
but never look back
fear me because
I'm the one behind you


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The following comments are for "Let's play this game called love...."
by cassandra

Cool..
Hi Cassandra, Your writing reads as if
you are young. I liked the flow in
some parts, I also liked a few of the words
that you used. I feel with a bit more
nurturing this lyric will be a gem..

Congrats on the cool write up..
All's good...Mouse..

( Posted by: raejon [Member] On: May 25, 2004 )

thanks
thanks for the comment. I'm not so young as you might think. I'm 20. but I'm just experimenting with writing lyrics. I#m used to write poetry.

( Posted by: cassandra [Member] On: May 25, 2004 )

Cool..
I reckon poetry is the best craft
to learn, before getting into songwriting.
You're on the right path..

Best wishes....MOuse..

( Posted by: Raejon [Member] On: May 28, 2004 )

spider
i like the first stanza of this song a lot.

"Spin a web for me
make it strong
and hide it from my eyes
till I'm tangled in
I'm your little fly"

it reminds me of one of my own songs called the mean song. spiders and lovers are, after all, the masters of deception.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 5, 2004 )





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