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The sound of running waters stirs those memories
of life that did not know the urge to reach
beyond its limits, try the rocky beach
in search of light and upright fantasies.

We are no longer living in the seas,
changed our fins for hands and plucked the peach.
And yet the surf still beckons and can teach
us to be humble and say wow & please.

The sound of waves and water calls to us,
like Quasimodo look-a-likes we walk
with packs of oxygen and use a pass

to visit our past, no need to talk,
till breathless we must stop our quick trespass,
out of the water, once again we stalk.



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The following comments are for "Emerging & Diving"
by Sneaky

Wow&Please
Well, that's the line that threw me, anyway. Had a hard time imagining why one would say "please" to the ocean (as in, please, don't suck me under permanently? ok, I can see that) Even on the third read I found this line a wee bit distracting. I think it's partly also due to the fact that your language changes tone so significantly, there, too.

Other than that, I really like this poem. It's gentle and charming and funny -- lovely stuff.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: June 2, 2004 )

The call of the Ocean
Like it, anybody who has spent a bit of time on the water or diving can relate to this. Though come to think of it, I think the sea beckoned me before I could even swim!

'And yet the surf still beckons and can teach
us to be humble and say wow & please'.

To me this is spot on, the inner feeling from our souls that reach out for something we have known.... The wonder of awe of this danderous, but beautiful mistress. I have great respect for the sea and also for your poetry,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 11, 2004 )





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