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Nothing Special


The morning sun reveals the beauty
Of the crystal by the steps.
You drank it dry before you threw it,
Spat some words before you left.

It's just my crystal now you're breaking,
You've done forever with my soul.
You damn the giving and the taking
Nothing in your hand stays whole.

Last night was nothing special,
We listened to you scream,
We listened to you drive away,
And then we ate ice cream.

Last night was nothing special.
It was bedtime when
I told her that it never would
Be happening again.

She and I are travelling
Tomorrow and today.
She laughed and cried together
When she learned we'd go away.

She's sleeping now beside me,
I wish that I could rest,
But she sees through your eyes,
Your blood dances in her chest.

Last night was nothing special,
Things just aren't what they were,
Last night you chose your freedom.
Last night I chose her.

It's winter in the mountains,
It's trouble I forsee,
So much of you inside our girl,
So much inside of me.

------
Paul Godfrey


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The following comments are for "Nothing Special"
by SamPark

something special
wow... I really enjoyed this piece...you have some really great lines...I particularly liked the last 3 stanzas...this child will be safe in her mother's arms tonight...and that is beautiful...thanks for sharing
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )

Someting extra special
I also enjoyed this poem and think it was someting extra special. I love poetry that tells it like a story and rhyming is a bonus.

I read it thinking this child would be safe in her father's arms tonight though! Unless I'm missing something, could not this be interpreted either way?

A brilliant pice of writing...

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )

Powerful
Some of the rhymes irked me but this is a powerful poem nonetheless. Deeply personal and honest. I agree with Reba: thanks for sharing it.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )

Bingo, Ivor
The poem can be read either way, but I wrote it with a mental/emotional position of father. This doesn't invalidate the mother/daughter position if that's the way you feel it, Reba. Interesting that I had not noticed it before. Thanks to all for your comments. (and yes, I got a little loose with the rhyme scheme, thanks viper!)

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )





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