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Geraniums float On lily ponds, with lotus Seeking refuge in The weedy reeds, Pulling the sun below the ice: Haze on a clear day No clouds Except the breath that exudes From your mouth In ice droplets.


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The following comments are for "Iceflower"
by False Dawn

What the?
How come the system has taken out my sequence of lines? Is there any way to edit it? I want it laid out like:

Geraniums float
On lily ponds, with lotus
Seeking refuge in
The weedy reeds,
Pulling the sun below the ice:
Haze on a clear day
No clouds
Except the breath that exudes
From your mouth In ice droplets.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

Iceflower
Hi Dawn, No matter how it's laid out it's still very beauitful...My Best, Lorraine

( Posted by: Lorraine [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

re:
Here I am! I haven't been back for a while because I've been on holiday (which means working loads in the local supermarket :( ) and I've had a slow poetry output - though, I am glad to say that I have upward of 20 poems that I can stick on here from my latest collection.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 7, 2004 )





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