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How did I get so lucky
to win this love
What could I have done
If I had known
would I ahve changed
to keep the past?
If I had known
we would meet
But knowing what I do
that you'ld come to me
and be so great
I'd never have changed
that which is now set
so thankful am I
that we were crossed
that by chance another way
would have lost our love
so when I look into your eyes
and seem lost endlessly
know that your love
is my universe where I dwell
so the love for you
I hold within
can never be taken
from my chest
my arms will always hold you
while I give my life to you
for you, anything
Anytime, I am yours, Eternal.

Chrispian H. Burks
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The following comments are for "Endless Eternal"
by Chrispian

my universe where I dwell
No comments in 10 years?

I really hope you post more poetry. You're a natural.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 14, 2011 )

Something fishy in Detroit
I don't know, it is not wise to slam the boss, but I am not always a wise person. Honest, yes, wise no.

The first thing I notice is the number of viewed times, hmmm versus the abilities the writer obviously has to change things at will here. I question this, but it is no biggee to me.

Second thing, and may you could help here, I still think that is in need of a "LETTERS" folder, as I think this makes a fair letter, almost as good as Bobby's Miles Davis letter. Don't get me wrong, letters can also be an art form, maybe even poetic, Bobby came close to having a pearl of a poetic letter.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

Yeah, this piece has been burrows for some time. I don't write much anymore, spend most of my time publishing the few sites I'm responsible for. I do need to write more.

And letters are a good category suggestion. I'll add that to the to do list. I want to look at the categories a bit anyway.

( Posted by: Chrispian [Admin] On: February 15, 2011 )

You deserve an explanation about number of times viewed. It's what happens when a reader accesses, as I have in the past, the random reading feature here at LitOrg. The reader is given, without any prompting, access to the category chosen. Poetry in this case. As this post goes way back to the early early days it makes sense it would have come up frequently and especially when the available posts were limited. I'd never seen this post until today. So, even though I have accessed the random reader feature it's not been one that's appeared.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

on topic
Chrispian, I normally don't care for poems on this topic but, because I know your history and what transpired since this post was done it's more than touching for me.

I'd encourage you to address the typo .. line 5 .. should be have .. right?

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

gone fishing
I didn't use the random reader. I actually went looking for his work. As I wrote on the other post, I was curious to read what kind of writer he is. There was nothing fishy about it, veeb. All I did was check posts from oldest to newest. Kind'a makes me smarter than a fifth grader, eh?

In my previous litdotorg existence I used the random reader every visit. You'd be amazed at the beautiful stuff that showed up. Shannon was a frequent random read due to his vast library of posts - which, sadly, are all gone now.

( Posted by: toscano [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

Chris's Love Notes!

Chrispian...I had forgotten how sentimental you were in your poetry. When I write about's viewed as "soppiness", I see no hint about that here!

Erin is so fortunate to have these "Valentines" to treasure in her old age! LOL

Also...great way to get back in her good graces, when an apology is needed...just leave them where she can find them...they'd melt any girl's heart!!!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

dropt out at 6th grade not 5th
Kind'a makes me smarter than a fifth grader, eh?

Wotcha tawlkin bout? You tryin 2 say u smarter dan me?

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

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