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She sat at the edge of the deck crying. She said it was over, she wouldn't do it again. Then why did Josh have to flip out?

Then from behind she heard a voice. It was sweet and gentle. "Is it safe to approach milady?"

She rubbed her eyes and nodded. They sat staring at the water for a goodten minutes when she said, "Why does Josh have to be that way?"

"Well Jess, I don't know. Maybe he just cares about you. And the idea scares him. I mean it scared all of us."

"Asshole." They looked at eachother and smerked.

"Umm, can I have the knife?"

A friend of mine said that this could hold ok by itself. What do you think?

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The following comments are for "Perfection, Pedestals, and mountains"
by Rincewind

Need More
It sounds promising, but there isn't enough to convey a complete picture. It may need just a bit more to be Flash Fiction, but I'm not really sure what rules, if any, there are for Flash. I would like to see more of this though, the title is what caught my attention.

( Posted by: wrath186 [Member] On: May 21, 2004 )

Not Enough

The reference to Mountain in the title goes unexplored, and your spelling and punctuation need some attention. This, however, is an intriguing beginning. I'd like to see the rest of it, whatever that is!


( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: June 9, 2004 )

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