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The Trouble with Being Charming

They say she slept a hundred years
In her castle room amid the thorns,
And all alone that hundred years
Her dreams evolved in wondrous forms,

Revolved and flowed around her bed
And charmed the hidden, sleeping child
In waves of violet and red,
For all the hundred years, she smiled!

But then the sweating prince came in,
Scratched from the thorns and smelling stale,
And claimed the prize he'd come to win -
there, usually, ends the tale.

But she had had a century
In which to gather expectations,
She had grown used to ecstacy,
He offered Marital Relations.

Oh, she tried to love her lover true,
But he seemed less and less than Charming,
And, when the honeymoon was through
Her mood grew more and more alarming!

The Prince's triumph turned to rust
In the tears of his morose Auroara.
It was not to earn a maid's disgust
He'd chopped through all that thorny flora.

So in the end, for both their goods
He gave it up and faced the fact,
Again cut through the bramble woods,
And took her there, and put her back!

------
Paul Godfrey


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The following comments are for "The Trouble with Being Charming"
by SamPark

Reality Rules...OK
Nice one! Thanks for a smile in the morning.

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

fairy tales
I really like how you let it end. we all know this fary tales and they always with 'and they lived happily everafter'. this one has a nice funny ending. well done.

( Posted by: cassandra [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

sleeping beauty
I enjoyed this...the flow is great, and so is your usage of words...great new twist on an old fairly tale...the end made me chuckle :)
great read
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

yeah...
well done, and funny. nice to have a twist on that old tale.

( Posted by: ark [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

Hysterical!
I loved it! Think I'll put this one on the bathroom mirror to remind me of my husband's virtues so I don't open my mouth before I've finished my first cup of coffee! Thanks for the reminder! (not that I really need it...)

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: May 23, 2004 )

hahahahaha!
Wonderful! I laughed so hard. This brought back the giggling fits that carried me away the first time I saw Shrek ("You've had a long time to think about this, haven't you?")!

Perfect comedic poem -- and those are pretty damn rare.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )

Thank you
Thank you all for your notes and comments. I almost ended this poem with "Happily ever after",
But the trouble with being Charming was that he chose the wrong love. No True Love, no Happily Ever After. However, I always thought that both the characters got what they wanted in the poem, (both have another chance) so I will just leave it as is. It really wasn't meant to be bitter. But mostly, thank you all for your comments. They mean a lot.

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 24, 2004 )

Well done...
I sure enjoyed this light-hearted poem, thanks for the joy I felt reading this!!!

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 12, 2004 )





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