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lips chewed raw,
blood seeping through the paper flesh.
thinking,
a pen held to her mouth.
hovering,
fresh off a night
thick with brown power drinks
and ninty-nine cent thrift shopping thrills.
This can't be real.

always watching.

eyes reflecting
a stanza, a poetic snippet for every image
people can't take it, disgrace their God
like a microphone.
tell it to the world.

a hundred percent commited to the second
(passes) as she grabs it.
and to relationships of
careless exploration
apparently not too lightly taken
bound like a red ribbon
snip it to unleash The Truth.

please cut her lose.

Lips chewed raw,
blood seeping through the paper flesh.
thinking,
"how to set words aflame,
and
float them in the air."


------
"God grant me distraction."
-Zampano


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The following comments are for "5 am Melody"
by Darkshine Raven

Melodic indeed
I love this poem. The way it flowed while I was reading it through was absolutely wonderful. Great way to start my morning, though it's not 5 a.m.! Thanks for the read.

( Posted by: Everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: May 20, 2004 )

DITTO
I Agree with Everybodyelsesgirl! It was a great read. Self expression turned to introspection at the flic of a pencil. Very good!

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: May 20, 2004 )

you get a gold star
ugh... titles are so important. that's what separated this from the other crap on the front page, an interesting, lovable title.

and a good poem to boot. bonus.

can't really express how bored i am of the poetry published here, 'cept john's and some of the darker stuff. so yeah, i liked it, it kept me reading. keep doing more of this.

ever read bukowski's stuff, by the way?

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: May 20, 2004 )

bukowski
No, dd I can't say that I have had the pleasure. From your comments above I suspect he is a dark and interesting poet?

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: May 25, 2004 )

Buk
Yeah, I just like his style. Cynical at times, blunt, dry. Some of my favorites are 'for jane' and 'bluebird'.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: May 26, 2004 )

Nice work
Very cool. This is a different sort of poem for you, Amanda (or did I just miss the point of your others? Haha), but you pull it off well.

I especially liked: "eyes reflecting / a stanza, a poetic snippet for every image / people can't take it, disgrace their God / like a microphone.
tell it to the world." Powerful stuff.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 26, 2004 )

Viper and on Buk
Thanks Viper I always love to hear good words from you. =D

And DD, about Buk...he's awesome! Thanks for introducing us (haha). Bluebird practically made me cry and then I latched on to another named "O, We Are the Outcasts". Great for a disenchanted writer to read over. Thanks again.

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: May 26, 2004 )





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