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What a wasted space we’ve kept
If all our lifelong time we’ve slept...
If idleness is dying’s due
Then naught of us has left a clue.
Our passing fades, as even’s throng
We leave unknown our living’s song.

Do not think my path is vain
For in its grip I became sane
I saw in trials – meanings deep
And there I sluiced my gems to keep:
Knowledge, won by work and wear;
Courage found by toil and care;
Hope was gained by faith in prayer;
Victory known, by being there!

When I am gone... a gift I leave
That by my words you might receive
Without the toil, angst or pain...
In just a poem; wisdoms' gain!


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The following comments are for "If We Leave, Unknown"
by MaxiiJ

If we leave unknown
I enjoyed the rhythm of your poem! It is solid and creates firm lines in a well thoughtout pattern. Thank you for sharing!


( Posted by: cheris621 [Member] On: May 20, 2004 )


I thought I was having deja vue, and then I noticed your last line edit. I thought it was a wonderful poem first time I read it and I much prefer your original last line.

My original comments were only expressing my concern that man is unable to learn fully from the mistakes of others, I feel that your poem makes us wish we could.

Thank you once again


(ps. sorry it was not you who commented on 'The Great Divide', but if you read it you will see my meaning.

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: May 21, 2004 )

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