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(rewritten thanks to fine critiques)

from the ruins
I still see you
a backdrop
behind the dreams
the nightmares
your face drawn
in long distaste

from the ruins
my voice calling
still drops
into your silence

Roxanne Smolen

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The following comments are for "From The Ruins 2"
by Starscapeviews

coming along
I missed the first one, having just arrived. This one seems to be coming along nicely. The words "drawn in long distaste" are good visually.

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

Looking for a Tasty Love
draw not your face
in long distaste...
move on to another flavor

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: May 29, 2016 )

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