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Can this be,
I don’t care anymore,
life has lost meaning,
no longer in need of living,
no longer in need of crying,
no longer in need of feeling,
this cruel world will no longer have me,
I may past to be in a better place,
is there such a thing,
will I forever haunt my soul,
will there ever be rest in peace for someone like me,
Forget it,
I don’t care remember,

what of the unknown,
will everyone I know forget me,
will everything I’ve done be forgotten,
will my thoughts be gone,

I do care,
I need my thoughts,
My thoughts are what make me whole,
remembering what is good forgetting what is not,
this must happen,
I must beat this feeling as well,
I must overcome,
can it be done?
Ask me tomorrow…….

------
Jeffrey Lawson


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The following comments are for "Don't Care"
by deadlygiant

Snatched from the jaws
I winced when I read the firsdt few lines of this. I thought, "Oh wonderful more black, nihilistic poetry from the underage masses" but the last stanza saved it and leant a sort of Dorothy Parker feel to the whole (in spirit not style).

Close to draff but grain in the end.

May you never thirst

Bliss

( Posted by: Enforced Bliss [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

Just wanted to comment
Jeffrey,

I just wanted to comment on how good this was. As a somebody who is not often stopped by pieces that do not rhyme (yes, old fashioned and closed minded} I do not often enjoy this type of poetry, but this grabbed me.

Well done,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )





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