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I meant to walk to the cemetery
but went instead to the park.
The children there were like autumn trees—
bright with frayed sweaters,
chattering noisily with the wind.
I sat at the edge of the pond
where they had built their castle of leaves.
The sky was bright blue.
It shimmered against the water
around cut-out geese
floating far from shore.
The dead leaves sifted
like gold coins through my fingers
as I cupped them in my hands,
and the wind swirled them into clouds
to dance among the children.

Roxanne Smolen

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The following comments are for "Continuance"
by Starscapeviews

brilliance without bluster
I love the picture you've shaped, here, and the amazingly slight way in which you've touched upon mortality amidst larger cycles. This poem is absolutely fabulous. Vunderbar!

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

Great Imagery
This is an magnificient piece of artwork. Great imagery.. My best line is the [14] 'as I cupped them in my hands.' wow! Printing that one.


( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

Lovely! Absolutely lovely!
I could leave it just at the subject line and it would say everything about this work. Lovely! Thanks for the read.

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

Thanks for the input!
Thank you all for taking the time to comment. I appreciate your kind remarks.

( Posted by: Starscapeviews [Member] On: May 18, 2004 )

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