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It's funny
What another person doesn't know
When they smile
You smile ( on the inside )
When her sweet voice speaks
You tingle.
It's funny
What love will do to someone
And what someone would do for love.
Are you aware that i love you
Put everything on the table
Let your troubles creep aside
I will take you on a trip
Of lust
Of passion
Lets set fire to our lives
I will explore your world
Tap into your soul
and find those things that hide
For I'm the love
The love you've kept inside
It's funny
What another person doesn't
That you're not really there.
so now i dare,
To wear,
Your loveless,lifeless
This journey is over,but i won't
So don't worry,your love
Our lives
Were never really there.


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The following comments are for "she was mine/but i missed her"
by redub

She was mine
I have to disagree about taking those lines out. "So don't worry, our love, our lives, Were never really there." Is a very powerful point at the end. I think you did a great job on this piece! Thank you.

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: May 17, 2004 )

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