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I wanted you and your heart,
I could see the good within
And saw it from the start
I wanted to tell you, but where did I begin?

I wanted to explain how I feel.
Your laughter,smile,and eyes.
They all seemed so surreal.
...It was me your heart denied.

No longer do I have that dream
Th one of you and me
It's a nightmare; releasing a silent scream.
Guess it's not meant to be.


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The following comments are for "You"
by reign

Nice..
This piece would make a nice song..

All the best.....Mouse..

( Posted by: Raejon [Member] On: May 17, 2004 )

great
great poem…
The feelings flow straightly from the heart

Regards
Fairgrace : )

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: May 17, 2004 )





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