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On the Need for Vision

The fog is thick around me.
It covers like a tomb,
A closely cloistered feeling,
A hovering, oval room.

But the walls are made of nothing
Except the mist and air,
Holding out the moonlight,
While still admitting fear.

And like a lonely sailor
Enshrouded on the sea,
I fear what hidden iceburg
Might do to ship and me.

I'd really rather see what is
Than fear the what-might-be.

------
Paul Godfrey


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The following comments are for "On the Need for Vision"
by SamPark

Powerful
A really powerful thought provoking poem. I love the way you use words and rhyme to get the meaning over,

A closely cloistered feeling,
But the walls are made of nothing
Enshrouded on the sea,

and your final two lines......

Thank you

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: May 15, 2004 )

excellent!
Nice work, Sam. Definitely do more like this.


libertus

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: May 15, 2004 )

Wonderful!
Can't wait to see more of your work posted here, brilliant!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 16, 2004 )





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