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Coming down from the mountain
I realized that I hadn't been up all that far.
Rescuing what I could from the mess
Sorting and pitching, cleaning and destroying.
It felt wonderful compared to what I knew
Was only a few steps behind my back.
Turning to confront it I felt unequalable
Realizing only too late that I was defeated.
It comes down to a point of realization
That appears to be a misguided thought.
The freedom that was so long hoped for
Quickly descended into unreachable grounds.

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The following comments are for "Shadow"
by Xlnt_1

Great Visuals, Questionable Subject
Your use of visual imagry is great, but for me it needs one word of direction as to WHAT SPECIFIC ITEM you were really talking about subject wise, and not in allegory.

But one of my old poetry teachers would argue that subject is a moot point because only the poet needs to know that!

But to be true to myself and why I read poetry, I had to rate this a 9 because I (myself only) could not quite grasp the full meaning of this work, and I (myself only) had to leave it, feeling unfulfilled.

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: May 13, 2004 )

missed point
We aren't supposed to be told which particular object is under discussion. If we were, the poem wouldn't be as intriguing. I think it's about facing up to a relationship ended fairly long ago, unsure of one's reaction. There is acceptance, but suspicion of one's own motives, or perhaps one's sincerity. Nifty poem.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 14, 2004 )

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