I woke about four
by johnlibertus (Member) - published: May 13, 2004
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Category - Poetry
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I woke about four
and walked to the store
and bought a pack of cigarettes
and smoked them til the morning light
turned the night to glory
and wrote some broken verses
to an old, sad story
bleeding through my pen
wondering again
why love is such a lonely way for me

I must be the King that was
and the King to be
for Guenevere is off again
in other company
and all this cheerful morning light
seems like a mockery

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by johnlibertus

I woke about four
I enjoyed this very much. I especially like the line "bleeding through my pen." Thank you for the read.

( Posted by: EverybodyElsesGirl [Member] On: May 14, 2004 )

adventure
Oh John, you always seem to be telling such sad adventure stories. This reminded me of driving to Wyoming at 12am and particularly arriving home at 5am.

I really enjoyed the simplisity of this piece while I was surprised (pleasantly) that it was one of yours. Bravo. =D

( Posted by: Darkshine Raven [Member] On: May 14, 2004 )

Of course . . .
Of course, as soon as I saw that John had posted another poem, I had to read it! And, as always, he doesn't fail to disappoint. Really, I'm becoming such a fan that I'm humiliated at myself for having nothing at all negative to say, and barely being able to construct a coherent comment. So let's say . . . it brought to life memories of lonely nighttime walks -- with a notepad and a pack of cigarettes -- that haven't entered my mind in many years. Thanks.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 14, 2004 )

Perfect
You have so many genius gems, but this one is certainly among your very best. Damn perfect, that's all I can say.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: May 15, 2004 )

You have caught the butterfly...
...of gossamer winged illusion. You did it well, too.

( Posted by: MaxiiJ [Member] On: May 15, 2004 )

Bleeding excellent
One of my favorites. The image of smoke rising above a bleeding pen. Somber.

( Posted by: CaptainKeyboard [Member] On: May 16, 2004 )

4 a.m.
Really good poem - the last two lines are perfect and says it all.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: May 30, 2004 )

Guenevere
"Guenevere is off again/in other company" is the heart of the gold that is this poem, and evokes an image of the smoking writer sitting among dusty volumes of classical works. Nice.

( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: June 7, 2004 )

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