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Hold my hand for now
my time is coming
i'll love you forever
but please just tell me something
do you love me
or do you not
will you be there when friends are not
hold me tight when i am cold
don't listen to what your friends get told
my time has come
i'll leave you now
please dont forget me
i'm sorry for what i have done although my sorries don't mean nothing
i took my life at my own hand
because i couldnt stop hurting my man
so now im alseep in an everlasting rest
well at least now they cant put my love to the test.

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Emptiest_Soul



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The following comments are for "Hold me"
by emptiest_soul

deep
Very deep poem. the idea is clearly passed over.
Very touching. Good work :)

( Posted by: broken [Member] On: May 10, 2004 )

hold me
a good pen. written with feeling.

( Posted by: swriteright [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )





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