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Single.
Alone on the couch.
An open spot just a
few feet away.
Empty.
Emptiness.
I guess there’s room to
lay down.
Stretch out.
Relax.
Relaxed.
I would rather be curled
up in a ball.
A warm body pushed up
against me.
Comfort.
Comforting.
Single.
Alone on the couch.
Just me.
Lonely.
Loneliness.

------
redub


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The following comments are for "thursday may 6th"
by redub

Great read
I really enjoyed this, the thought of some of that alone time sounds really great to me though. Strange how people have different perspectives...

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )

Relaxed
I like the way you describe being relaxed, and yet still wanting more. Nice read!

( Posted by: EverybodyElsesGirl [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )

ambivalence
I liked the ambivalence suggested by the poet here. There's a loneliness and a yearning, but also a realization that not everything about her situation is terrible. You cna feel acceptance closing in. Quite effective.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 11, 2004 )





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