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The road I walk is not steady at all.
There are rocks in it
and I stumble when I'm not looking.
No one stumbles more often than I,
but it doesn't matter if you fall when you're alone
with no one to notice that you did

feel what you did.
That's the comfort of it all--
when you are truly alone
there's no one to whom you must explain it.
So there's no one to question the reasons why I
am on the road looking

(for what am I looking)
or to hear my answer if I did.
No one has more answers than I
although the questions haven't held up at all
and the road doubles back and replays and replays it
as if it were the road alone

with the power to keep me alone,
stumbling and looking
for some way to end it,
as if it were the road who questioned the things I did
and not you at all.
No one questions more than I

but I
never expected you to go on alone
leaving me to make sense of it all.
I never expected, when I wasn't looking,
you would ever turn away like you did.
You were the forever to help me through it.

That was our pact, and you knew as you broke it
no one would be more righteous than I.
But righteousness is only pain when you're alone,
and sometimes I wonder what it was that I did
(why did I have to stumble when you were looking)
and the road doubles back over it all.

I'll never keep it as straight as you did,
but then there's only me and I'm not looking.
That's the comfort of it all, now that I'm alone.

Roxanne Smolen

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The following comments are for "No One"
by Starscapeviews

Hi Roxanne, I know your poems titled no one,
that's cool with me.
What I would like to see in here is a happy
ending. Something that would make me believe
that even though this person is alone he/she
is still happy, and will carry on no matter
what.. throw out the negatives in the end
verses for positives..

This is just an idea of lines you might
be able to write into your poem. I hope
these lines give you other ideas as well..

Even though you went on alone
I will carry on, to find happiness
Time is my mentor, my healer,
Creating a path of goodness,
Gently flowing gracefully,
As I embrace my emotions,

This is just my opinion, if your lyric
works the way it is. That's cool with me..
Be free to use these lines, I wrote them from
your lyric.. They're yours not mine.

Best wishes.... Mouse..

( Posted by: raejon [Member] On: May 8, 2004 )

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