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Today I met an angel
she glided towards me across the parking lot , floating on air
Starbucks drinks in her hand
her confidence shining bright as she gets
Closer.
I've never been nervous around a girl in my life,
But at this moment i feel like running away as fast as I can.
she's almost in front of me
Moving across the concrete with a beautiful stride
aware of who she is and what she wants.
Maybe it's all a dream , maybe she will just walk right by
But on this day
i was about to meet an angel.
THE MOMENT :
As if I blacked out
For a quick second , then woke up in heaven.
Her smile penetrating and radiant
I can almost start to feel my knees buckle
Her blue eyes, beautiful ,intoxicating
Like gazing at a lake hidden deep in the hills on a quiet sunny afternoon.
Her laugh sweet, innocent
Reminds me of childhood ,being a kid
Like my dad could yell out the front door any minute
Telling me it's time to come in.
Her voice soft, comforting
As if she could make every word that came out of her mouth meaningful.
Maybe it's all a dream, maybe i caught this all in a glance.
Maybe the smile i left with plastered on my face was part of a vivid imagination.
But if you ask me.
I met an
Angel.


------
redub


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by redub

Yelling dad
I liked this a lot. I like the contrast between the "angel" gliding across concrete, and the everyday, "starbucks" bringing it back down.

My favorite part is about being a little kid. Made me think of my dad yelling at me to come in from playing. Nice thing to look back on. Thanks.

( Posted by: everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: May 6, 2004 )

An Angel
What a beautiful job you did with your descriptions, I too fell in love with "like my dad could yell..." brings back such wonderful memories of not wanting to come in. I loved this, totally loved it!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 7, 2004 )





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