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I am a drifter of memories.
Locked in my thoughts of the years I've lived,
when life had a thirsting desire.

I walk on the paths of men
between the ground and heaven,
and the reflection of a hollow sky.

A gentle breeze sings with your voice.
A counterfiet melody in my ears,
'I am what once was, but will never be again,
for there is no future in your past'.

When will the days gone by be put to rest?
When you walk upon my grave,
and place flowers against the stone.
Until then, I'll wake each morning with yesterday's ghost.


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The following comments are for "Yesterday's Ghost"
by Reba

Nice!
This was a great read! Thank you.

( Posted by: Everybodyelsesgirl [Member] On: May 6, 2004 )

counterfiet melody
I really enjoyed this piece. I particularly liked your choice of words in the 1st & 2nd lines of the 3rd stanza. Will look forward to reading more of your work!

( Posted by: doughnut [Member] On: May 6, 2004 )

free style
thanks for your comments...free style is my weak point, I usually stick to rhyming poetry...so any free style work from me, is a real challenge...lol...I feel that this piece is lacking something, but I haven't quite figured it out yet...I appreciate your comments, and thanks for reading me :)
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: May 7, 2004 )

Freestyle...
I prefer free style, and I have to say that you did a good job with this. 'Yesterday's ghost' - great theme!

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: May 7, 2004 )

Futue of the past

Hello Reba….your piece was really good. I enjoyed it….I particularly loved these two lines:

'I am what once was, but will never be again,
for there is no future in your past'.

All the Best
Fairgrace : )

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: May 8, 2004 )

Viper9
I love time. Poems and stories and what-have-you on time always capture my interest. And this, certainly, was no exception. Intriguing, enigmatic, and insightful.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 10, 2004 )

Yesterday's Ghost
Reba, this is truly awesome! I absolutely love it!I love free verse, and you did a great job with it.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: May 12, 2004 )

wowza
thank you all for your comments...I have to say that I didn't expect this piece to go over all that well...I guess I'm my own worst critic...I give credit to any poet who writes free-style as a rule, because for me it's a challange...thanks for reading, and commenting :)
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: May 13, 2004 )





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