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old poetry. i haven't done it in a looooong time...
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She was standing in the rain,
like a ghost.
Ethereal.
Crying and hugging herself,
looking for some comfort
against the storm.
Shivering.
I watch and wonder what I could do,
what I could say.
Slowly I step forward,
and take her into my arms.
Muttering sweet nothings,
But she does not seem to hear,
just keeps crying,
avoiding my eyes.
I kiss the tears away,
Before they are lost.
Lost in the rain.
like my words in the wind.
Another broken dream.


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And another thing is, no matter how much you think you love someone, you'll step back when a pool of their blood edges too close.


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The following comments are for "Lost"
by direb0y

hi!
wow. i must say that was very nice. it was conveyed very nicely plus it was pretty realistic, unlike some fairy tale love poems. quite nice.

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: February 6, 2002 )

like this alot!!
direb 0y,
I really like the way you made the poem flow, the execution of it was incredible. Keep up the good work can't wait to read more.
Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: February 6, 2002 )

Rain...mmmmmmmm
I like the feeling of rain and emotion mixed together. Rain always brings about feelings in people and I think, as such, it belongs in poetry. Good use of words. I like.

( Posted by: Jeff [Member] On: February 7, 2002 )

Hi
Excellent write. You expressed the emotions well.

( Posted by: kat [Member] On: April 14, 2002 )





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