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Godís words that snare and bind the minds of men,
Tight woven all from lies and fear and myth,
Deflect the light of reason from their eyes
And turn aside the sharpest barbs of truth;
To leave a tortured peace within the soul

The mind of God that thinks at manís command
Constructs the ways that lead to life and death;
Painting the halls and corridors of heaven
With promises, and gifts, beyond compare
And burning hell with torment, toil and pain.

The hand of God that moves at manís command
Holds fast the prize of immortality
Announcing through the chosen mouths of god
That all who win the race are dead, but live,
And wait to greet us all, beyond the grave.

The living must obey and keep their place
And do as man has told them God has said:
Else heaven dims and all that golden light,
Fades to the deep red yawning maw of hell
Where broken rules demand eternal pain.

If man from thinking can create a god
And in ten thousand years can make it hide
The darkness and the fears, beyond the light
Cast by the fire of knowledge in his mind,
Then man has made a prison for his soul.

The place of immortality lies not
In Heavenís house, or in the pit of Hell,
But in the truth that burns within the mind
That seeks to know whatís hidden in the dark:
And shines the light of reason on its fears.


The following comments are for "Fundamentalism"
by JamesRae

Dear God
This is an incredibly sharp and tightly written piece, which travels through it's knotty subject like a speedy flint straight to it's point.

I empathize with your message. I grew up among Fundamentalists, and at a certain point, 16, attending a Charismatic church-school, kept a copy of Ariel $ Will Durant's *Age of Voltaire* on my desk as a kind of talisman, a reminder that there is more beyond these walls of mandatory chapel and compulsory KJV memorization.

And yet... As a writer, is this truly all that you see? Hope and fear goading life into sharp divisions of Shall and Shall Not? What presses certain people into these positions? And why do some take their faith so much more seriously? Do you honestly believe that religion is but a form of mind control? And if so, do you also believe that it's the only one?

If I worry over your poem at all, it may because it is nearly too clever and cleverness can afflict the mind as devestatingly as any variant of Fundamentalism, causing us to only see those abstract glittering points we ache to sharpen and lose our sense of what is truly human. We all have brilliant suns just beginning to rise up over the horizon, tauntingly within reach (though you are dead to me, yet I live in some far better realization) and even atheists have reasons for Jihad.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: April 27, 2004 )

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